Saturday, August 17, 2013

Fabric ~ Five Sentence Fiction



Cut from the Same Cloth


I watch Gramma Sophie raise the sweat soaked cocktail to her red-stained clown lips, wondering to myself how she continues to have the desire or energy to replay this scene over and over.

Humming a melody she watches me through slit eyes, fear and excitement clouding her delicate features.

Gramma Sophie leans back in her chair, the hint of a smile on her lips savoring the knowledge that Earl has come back, just like she knew he would.

Winking at me she whispers, "Earl, you've always known this is my favorite song, shall we dance"?

I rake my fingers through my hair and wonder if she'll ever remember who I really am.




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What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.
The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: FABRIC


12 comments:

  1. When I read this, I had a feeling of darkness along with sadness for both characters - I'm not sure why the darkness came through for me. Perhaps because it's similar to those psychological situations I write about when I do horror stories.

    But anyway, it's good!

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    1. Thank you for taking the time to leave a comment for me. I look forward to and respect your analysis of my writing. Yes, it is a dark tale and all too real for many.

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  2. I agree with the feeling of darkness. I think it's the setup in the first sentence and the mental picture of Grandma Sophie that came to mind.
    You did a great job of bringing the sadness of the situation home with the last sentence.
    Good story! Glad you were able to find the time to write.

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    1. Thanks Kath, I realized I'm not that busy and I really did miss the creative process. Thanks for the positive words. Glad to hear you could see Gramma Sophie.

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  3. Hi Barbara
    I came by to check out our blog and I LOVE it. I can't wait to read more. I'm our newest follower via Bloglovin
    Angel @ sewcraftyangel.blogspt.com

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    1. Thank you so much Angel I'm really taking the time to make it mine. I really enjoy your blog and have been following for a couple months now. Thanks for dropping by and leaving such a nice comment.

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  4. Barbara, that is unbelievable how you can tell an entire story in such few words. I felt sadness as if I already knew the characters. Your a fantastic writer!

    Congrats on the weight loss!!

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    1. Thank you Betty. I love writing and these 5 sentence challenges are fun to do. If you think I'm a fantastic writer you should read some of the others. I appreciate your kind words. And yes, I am stoked by the weight loss.

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  5. oh my goodness.
    I am a Fabricholic!
    I think I will go write something.
    Thanks for stopping by my blog...

    Happy to meet you here !

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    1. I do enjoy putting pen to paper. And I am happy to meet you too.

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  6. This happens everyday and you have told it like it is.

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    1. Thank you Patricia. It's unfortunate but a very real situation that is only beginning to thousands of older folks each and every day.

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