Saturday, June 15, 2013

Tiffany's first Five Sentence Fiction

This story was written by my niece Tiffany.  She needs to practice her story writing skills for the 4th grade Florida FCAT Writes.  Students are graded on their creativity rather than focusing on spelling, which comes in the later grades. My spelling corrections (*) will appear at the end of her story.  Over the summer months I will be sending Tiffany the word prompts so that she can participate in FSF through me.  The thought for the story was hers and we developed it over about 1 hour.  She typed it up and found the picture to go along with her story.  Thank you for granting me this little deviation from the normal process.  Next week we'll both have a FSF story.  Hope everyone has a wonderful weekend.

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Tiffany's first Five Sentence Fiction


The Busted House


"Are Brandon and Weenie still calling each other gay?"

"Probably, but Brandon is teching* Weenie how to drive Dumpy (backhoe) and Dozey (bulldozer)."

"I would be fritin* they would run me over, or brack* the machines."


"I will pretet* you by holding up five fingers, that means
stop."

"I still think they are going to crash into the new house!"







*teaching
*frightened
*break
*protect

18 comments:

  1. I love this post. I think it's great that you are doing this with her.

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    1. Thanks Ellen. I'm sure Emilie will be facing the same thing this coming school year. We had fun working on this together. Once she sees the comments she'll be hooked.

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  2. To be honest, this has better spelling and grammar than most of Yahoo news articles these days. It's a bit more interesting, too.

    I think everyone will enjoy reading her posts!

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    1. haha, thanks for the encouragement. She has a quirky little sense of humor and it shows in her thought process. We appreciate it.

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  3. Cute story, love reading her perspective. What a wonderful thing to do with her...

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    1. Thank you so much for commenting. I know that Tiff will just love reading the fun, nice things the "group's, (as she calls it) comments. We had a blast working it all out.

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  4. A writer in the making! I love it!

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    1. Thank you for stopping by. Tiff loves to write stuff, now we're trying to make stories.

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  5. Such a fun story! I'm betting there is a drawing that could accompany this piece of writing? Keep on writing your stories and sharing them with others!

    blue hue wonderland

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    1. Oh, I'm sure Tiff could have come up with a drawing. She loves to draw and create books and cards for all of us. A very creative child.

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  6. I love how Tiffany tells the story with only dialogue. She paints such a complete picture with few words.

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    1. Tiff was very excited to write in dialogue. In books she's read dialogue but never used it in a story. She had loads of fun creating this story. Thanks for stopping by.

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  7. I think this is a lovely idea.. How old is Tiffany? Way to go little Miss...x

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    1. Tiffany is 9. We are trying to instill the love of writing in her in the hopes that she will continue writing even when she doesn't have to. She loves all the positive comments.

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  8. Love your story, Tiffany. There's a little humor, suspense, educational value...and we were introduced to some interesting characters.
    Can't wait for the next one! :)

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    1. Thanks Lisa, she is very excited about all the nice comments from everyone. Amazing she thought of this all by herself. The first sentence stemmed from her brother and his friends always asking each other that question. She thought it was funny that she could write that in her story.

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  9. Ha! I love this story! Great job, Tiff.

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    1. This is my favorite. Her brother, Brandon and his friend Weenie, always call each other gay, as adolescent boys will do. Once she came up with that thought her story took off from there. It's my favorite too!

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