Saturday, May 18, 2013

New Beat - Five Sentence Fiction



What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week:  ACCIDENT

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New Beat
Feeling as though a magnetic field surrounds him with its attraction; a current thrumming through his entire being, pulsing and throbbing along his healing scar.

His new heart lurches erratically creating a new intense, rhythmic beat.

Scanning his surroundings he searches the unfamiliar faces for the source of this eerie sensation.

His eyes lock on a sad, young woman and unsure why, his feet are steadily moving forward drawn by her knowing stare.

As she reaches for his hand, he fully understands that the sound of her dreams shattering is his new heart beat.




12 comments:

  1. Oh how moving. So sad. So many questions..

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    1. Sad but uplifting. One life taken another beginning again. Thanks for dropping by.

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  2. Very emotional scene and you've captured it very well, Barbara. The last line, in particular, is perfectly formed.

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  3. Such an emotional, heart breaking piece. Powerfully written showing the chance of a new life at such a high cost to others. xx

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  4. This is very well done; a powerful piece.

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  5. Such an interesting piece and very poetic in its telling. Lovely work.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate it.

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  6. Sad and beautiful story. I agree with Jo-Anne, the last sentence is perfect.

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