Saturday, April 13, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction


What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: EDGE 


As she walks through the rooms, invisible doors swing shut locking in each memory.  Her fingertips lightly brush away the dangling cobwebs while each tendril gently attempts to tug her back.  A kaleidoscope of thoughts and pictures twist and turn beckoning her with their mirrors of color.  She stops,
only for a moment, to savor the smells lingering and tantalizing her to stay.  
Her footprints hurry up to catch her, determined not to be left behind, alone...
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16 comments:

  1. Bad Word MamaApril 13, 2013 at 6:46 PM

    Absolutely beautiful!!!

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    1. Barbara Mizzoni-YoungApril 13, 2013 at 6:54 PM

      Thanks Ellen. It took me awhile to develop this story.

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  2. MaggieApril 13, 2013 at 7:47 PM

    You had me pulled in from beginning to end. Your words are wonderful and I love that I really want to know what comes next. Well done!

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  3. Robin Leigh MorganApril 14, 2013 at 12:16 AM

    Yes her footsteps ran to catch up with her, yet I somewhat sense that the footseps of her heart wanted to stay. It's a terrible conflict she has going on inside her, while her mind knows it's time to move on into the future and into the unknown possible she'll have to face, her heart wants to stay in the safety of the past. It's a terrible conflict each of us has to face everyday.

    VERY THOUGHT PROVOKING !!!

    THANKS for sharing. :-) :-) :-)

    Could you step by and comment on my endeavor for this week. :-)

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    1. Barbara Mizzoni-YoungApril 14, 2013 at 5:46 PM

      Loved your story about everlasting love. Thank you for your specific comments about my story. You feel it exactly. Yes, we all struggle with being on the brink.

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  4. dragonsflypoppyApril 14, 2013 at 3:16 PM

    Very powerful. Beautiful words xx

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    1. Barbara Mizzoni-YoungApril 14, 2013 at 5:46 PM

      Thank you so very much. I enjoy your writing as well. Sharing is caring. xxx

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  5. grace blackApril 15, 2013 at 10:36 AM

    loved this one!

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    1. Barbara Mizzoni-YoungApril 15, 2013 at 8:09 PM

      Thank you for taking the time to comment. I appreciate you.

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  6. Melanie ColeApril 16, 2013 at 11:05 AM

    Very poetic!

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  7. AnonymousApril 16, 2013 at 2:31 PM

    I love the images you've painted - invisible doors and clinging webs. Touching and beautiful.

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    1. Barbara Mizzoni-YoungApril 16, 2013 at 7:32 PM

      Thank you so very much. I'm thrilled that you could see the images. I appreciate you.

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  8. Kathy AlexanderApril 17, 2013 at 5:10 PM

    LOVE this one, Barb. Great imagery.

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    1. Barbara Mizzoni-YoungApril 17, 2013 at 5:12 PM

      Thanks, Kathy. I really enjoyed creating the image in this story.

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