What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: EDGE
As she walks through the rooms, invisible doors swing shut locking in each memory. Her fingertips lightly brush away the dangling cobwebs while each tendril gently attempts to tug her back. A kaleidoscope of thoughts and pictures twist and turn beckoning her with their mirrors of color. She stops,
only for a moment, to savor the smells lingering and tantalizing her to stay.
Her footprints hurry up to catch her, determined not to be left behind, alone...
Absolutely beautiful!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ellen. It took me awhile to develop this story.
DeleteYou had me pulled in from beginning to end. Your words are wonderful and I love that I really want to know what comes next. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank yo so much for your kind words.
DeleteYes her footsteps ran to catch up with her, yet I somewhat sense that the footseps of her heart wanted to stay. It's a terrible conflict she has going on inside her, while her mind knows it's time to move on into the future and into the unknown possible she'll have to face, her heart wants to stay in the safety of the past. It's a terrible conflict each of us has to face everyday.
ReplyDeleteVERY THOUGHT PROVOKING !!!
THANKS for sharing. :-) :-) :-)
Could you step by and comment on my endeavor for this week. :-)
Loved your story about everlasting love. Thank you for your specific comments about my story. You feel it exactly. Yes, we all struggle with being on the brink.
DeleteVery powerful. Beautiful words xx
ReplyDeleteThank you so very much. I enjoy your writing as well. Sharing is caring. xxx
Deleteloved this one!
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking the time to comment. I appreciate you.
DeleteVery poetic!
ReplyDeleteThank you Melanie. I appreciate your comment.
DeleteI love the images you've painted - invisible doors and clinging webs. Touching and beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you so very much. I'm thrilled that you could see the images. I appreciate you.
DeleteLOVE this one, Barb. Great imagery.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kathy. I really enjoyed creating the image in this story.
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